Scars – My Entry for Charli Mills’ Carrot Ranch Flash Fiction (Nonfiction)

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Flash Fiction Rodeo Contest

 

This was my second entry for Charli Mills’ Carrot Ranch Flash Fiction (Nonfiction) Rodeo Contest. It was a double-header 99 words no more or less times 2.

 

The topic – Scars – was inspired by a quote by Stephen King – whose book on writing should be read, I believe, by all aspiring writers. He wrote “Writers remember everything … especially the hurts. Strip a writer to the buff, point to the scars, and he’ll tell you the story of each small one. From the big ones you get novels. A little talent is a nice thing to have if you want to be a writer, but the only real requirement is the ability to remember the story of every scar.” Entries were to show a remembered scar using any genre the writer chose in 198 words. 

You can read more about the contest and see some entries over at Charli’s Carrot Ranch

 

Forbidden Passion

 

Our eyes met and locked with desire. A whirlwind of wining, dining, and dancing kept our hearts riding on the crest of passion. When his fingertips held my face, it left imprints of electric shocks into the depths of never-ending want while I’d gaze into his big, soulful eyes.

 

The way he said my name increased the rhythm of my heart. When we danced we became one, and our hearts joined in an unstoppable, pulsating desire. No words of love were ever spoken to complicate our romance, yet we both knew, we understood within.

 

Harsh reality set in after that magical year we shared, much longer than we’d both anticipated. One night, one look in his once smiling eyes showed the happiness was stripped from his soul. We remained in a desperate embrace dancing our last dance before the sacrifice.

 

His lips parted with pain, spilling the words “I love you, but I can’t be completely yours.” Our lips so close we shared the same oxygen as our tears melded, tasting each other’s brine. His hand squeezing mine so tight, his wedding ring embedded my palm. The music stopped, we parted, each leaving with half the other’s heart.

 

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  1. Wow that is powerful Debby… brilliant piece of Flash fiction.. felt every emotion.. you need to do more..♥

    1. Thanks so much Sal – so not really my wheelhouse so thanks for the encouragement. You never know, there may be more down the road – New genre – Flash Nonfiction LOL 🙂 <3

      1. Yes! We accept BOTS as flash fiction at the Ranch, and fiction allows for embellishments to any non fiction. I hope you get hooked because I’d love to read more from you!

        1. Thanks Charli. I plan on joining in more. 🙂 xx

      2. I think that might fall under a different category all together!!! ♥

        1. Maybe a new genre! 🙂 xx

  2. Enjoyed reading this one Debby!

    1. Thanks Stevie. 🙂

  3. I love how you went for the emotional scar with your story, Debby! A great read, full of passion, romance and angst – and of course the twist at the end! Brilliant.

    1. Thanks Annika. Again, out of my comfort zone but glad I entered. 🙂 xx

      1. It didn’t come across at all…seemed so fluid and reassured!

        1. Wow, thank you so much for that Annika. 🙂 <3

  4. What a wild ride, Debby. I have scars too but none of this variety – ha!

    1. Taken from the pages of my first book Marian. 🙂

  5. Oh that’s powerful, Deb. I hope it isn’t true. It’s way too sad.

    1. Thank you Jacquie. It was a very long time ago. In fact there was a chapter in my first book, Conflicted Hearts. 🙂

  6. I would say the writing of a weapon Debby. Well done lady x

    1. Lol, I would say you’re too much, but never enough!!! LOL. Hope you’re on the mend my Lovely. <3 xxxx

  7. Beautiful and powerfully evocative flash, Debby!

    1. Thank you so much Charli. A big compliment from you. 🙂 x

  8. Wonderful, Debby. Such romance and then such heartbreak. You captured all that swirling emotion beautifully. I’m so glad you shared this and would love to read more! Keep it up. <3

    1. Thanks for the kudos Diana. Sometimes I surprise myself when getting out of my comfort zone.I think I’ll be doing more of this in the coming year. 🙂 <3

      1. Oh good. I’ll be sure to read every one. 🙂

        1. Aw, thank you so much Diana 🙂 xx

  9. Great writing and very brave. Thanks for sharing, Debby.

    1. Thank you Olga 🙂 x

  10. Wonderful, Debby. So very full of deep emotion.

    1. Thanks so much Robbie. It was certainly different writing for me. 🙂

  11. OHHH… a sexy flash fiction! Good one, Sis! <3

    1. LOL thanks Sis! 🙂 <3

  12. Yup, that was very flashy, there, cowgirl! 😎

    1. LOL John. 🙂 😉

  13. oh wow, Debby, what a beautiful but heart breaking story. xxx

    1. Thanks so much Adele. I”m really astounded at the feedback my little attempt at FF is receiving. 🙂 <3

      1. It’s good and it jogged my heart strings other peoples too. Perhaps, you could do more? <3

        1. Thanks so much Adele. I think I will do more come the new year. <3

          1. Yes, I hope so. <3

  14. It’s amazing how a short read can evoke an overpowering response. I wanted to shake the guy and give him a lecture on what an idiot he was for walking away! Fantastic, Deb. You’re breaching new horizons ❤

    1. LOL T, thanks for the kudos my sweet friend! I think I am branching out. Oh, and, as for the guy, he’s still eating his heart out! <3 :) ;)

      1. Welcome, Deb. As for the guy … That’ll teach him!!! ❤

    1. Thank you so much Christoph <3

    1. Oh thanks so much Kate. 🙂

  15. Excellent piece of writing, Debby. Sometimes the fewer words, the better story. Well done.

    1. Thank you so much Darlene. I think I’ll be trying more of these in the new year. 🙂

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